What do you think about this poem?????

hes the most beautiful garden


the most beautiful garden spoiled upon daisys


i picked at the stems so close too near


he gave and shook me with anger and fear


i understand the way i water his love


he bought the lady dancers and gave them a look instead


to my eyes he pushed and crazied me up


i fell on the edge he never held me up


even though i hated his ways


he stares and loves only on anniversary days


i layed on him with flowers galore


he shoved and raged my anger even more


but still i watch from the side of his gaze


and i wonder how anybody can watch him die away


to me hes there and my heart is stll aware


to him i stare and his heart i keep it there


and now i see how he blooms each day


because hes the most beautiful garden


the most beautiful garden spoiled upon daisies

What do you think about this poem?????
Ive read alot of poetry on this q%26amp;a and most of it is horrid. I really like this one. Its very deep and has emotions splattered all over it. I like your style and the way that you put it all out there but hid it in %26quot;the garden%26quot;. You have some tallent and I think you should consider doing more with it. Use a little puncuation because that will help you to break the poem up a bit and give it that extra kick you are looking to show. I love the line %26quot;I understand the way I water his love%26quot; thats a great line and you have so many hidden meanings here. I would love to see more of your work. I think that you may get some negative feedback on this one because I think it may go right over some peoples heads but dont listen to them this poem is good.
Reply:It%26#039;s compellingly demented. I like it.
Reply:don%26#039;t like it-sorry
Reply:its good
Reply:It is really good!!! I love it. You can tell you put your heart and soul into it!!! You are a really good poet. I would love to read more of your poems!!! Keep on keeping on with these good poems



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